Comments on: 30 Rock spec script – “Tweakers”

By: Terri

Terri — Tue, 29 Sep 2009 01:16:46 +0000

I have to disagree on a couple points. Firstly, I think that the premise was good. Made me laugh thinking about all the crew on Adderall. Though, I think that it kind of peters out when Liz gets on it. I’d have to read the rest, of course. I agree that the voice of Jack was really strong and good, and that the rest could use a little work. I tried to imagine the characters saying it, but some of the dialogue was a little forced.

The Liz-wasting-her-weekend joke could be accurate with a little tweaking to make the captions have times instead of days. Like Saturday: 10:00 am, 1:00 pm, 6:00 pm, or something like that. Not a big deal. Also (another bad thing), I thought Jonathan was a little overused. Or just, I dunno, that scene with the bread was a little confusing. Was Jonathan on the Adderall?

All-in-all, I think it was a decent effort (from a fan of the show), and like I said, I really think the premise is solid.

By: autumn

autumn — Tue, 04 Aug 2009 05:51:19 +0000

i do agree, but i could have sworn i saw the beginning on 30 rock, but i can’t remember the rest. it is a pretty good beginning and you have some of the characters down, sp good job.

By: name

name — Wed, 29 Jul 2009 12:36:16 +0000

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By: Honest John

Honest John — Fri, 17 Apr 2009 20:11:46 +0000

Sorry, but I don’t think this is a good script. Do you really think that they need to resort to drug humour on a great show like 30 Rock? The plot is boring. The idea of Dr. Spaceman giving out weird drugs has been done on the show already when he offers Tracy and Jack various colored drugs. That thread has been done and it’s never funny the second time around.

Liz also wouldn’t be home on a Friday as that’s when TGS airs (you had a montage of her resting on a Friday). After the TGS After Party, Liz would probably be the type to go home and pass out. It would be well into Saturday morning at this point.

Also, I don’t think that the Jedi stuff is very 30 Rock unless you showed it from Liz’s perspective when she was in a drug induced state. Even then, it’s a stretch.

No offence, but overall, I’d say that you need to try again with a fresher plot, because on the good side, some of your jokes were very good. You especially seem to get the Jack character.

Good luck.

By: Dorothy

Dorothy — Sun, 08 Mar 2009 17:11:57 +0000

Nice job. Did you submit it to NBC? I’ve got a few short scenes but haven’t written a whole show yet.

By: stanmoe

stanmoe — Sun, 10 Aug 2008 05:31:01 +0000

This isn’t bad. where’s the rest?

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